This takes me back a long time to some early cyberpunk. Really great scene. Gritty. I like the lost arm bit.
My only criticism is his assumption that his employer sent the wraith is too abrupt. I'd rather you revealed that through the wraith first, or through inner monologue, narrowing down the suspects.
Awesome bit of feedback thank you! Yeah in retrospect that definitely would've helped draw it out a bit and make it less of a sudden "aha' sort of moment. Definitely something I need to keep in mind for the future!
This takes me back a long time to some early cyberpunk. Really great scene. Gritty. I like the lost arm bit.
My only criticism is his assumption that his employer sent the wraith is too abrupt. I'd rather you revealed that through the wraith first, or through inner monologue, narrowing down the suspects.
Awesome bit of feedback thank you! Yeah in retrospect that definitely would've helped draw it out a bit and make it less of a sudden "aha' sort of moment. Definitely something I need to keep in mind for the future!
Cool fight scene. I dig the vibes of it all. Keep it up
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